Janet
October 5, 2009 — Lee QuinbyJanet,
Once you have read my two posts about Proposals and Methods, I think you will see what needs to be done with your first draft. Rather than focusing your topic, you actually over-narrowed it by discussing only the part about student adjustment and/or mistreatment in the U.S. Your earlier paper indicated much more on the other elements that are part of this process of young people leaving South Korea for the United States for education and the problems that ensue. So when you rewrite your proposal using all of the elements I mention, it will be necessary for you to clarify your research on demographic data and certain economic and educational trends in South Korea as well. As I understand it, you will have a section that deals with emotional and economic life in the U.S., but please keep that in perspective as you provide the cultural context for this phenomenon.
